Before & After Student Writing: “My Daily Routine”

This is a new student from Mainland China who has joined our online English classes. Her instructor assigned the topic, “tell us about your daily life.” Note her first draft of the essay, then the copy after her Dreyercoaching.com teacher discussed and edited it with her. This young student lives in a Chinese-speaking environment, so I think her first draft is quite good to start! However, she shows very common problems that Asian students experience when they learn English, and her teacher helps her with these:

– spelling
– verb tense
– punctuation
– prepositions (in, at, after, etc.)
These are all things that we can help you with, at DreyerCoaching.com–writing.

FIRST COPY

My daily life

In my daily life, I always get up at 9 a.m, and then, I will brushing my teeth and washing my face. After that, I will eatting breakfast. My breakfast usually eat bread, milk or noodles, but sometime, I’m not feel like eatting breakfast. After breakfast, I’ll do some homework. Wnen I finished my homework, that is time for having lunch. Sometimes, I’ll take a break at noon.
Afternoon, I’ll going to the garden to do some sport excersize, such as running, swimming or playing basketball. I think do some sport exsersize are good for our health, so I almost do sport excersize everyday.

In the evening, after dinner, I will do some leisure things. I always watching TV witn my parent, but sometimes I’ll playing computer and my phone.

Finally, I will go to bed. So that is my daily life.

COPY AFTER EDITING with a DreyerCoaching.com Teacher

My Daily Life

In my daily life, I always get up at 9 a.m., and then I brush my teeth and wash my face. After that, I eat breakfast. For breakfast, I usually eat bread, milk, or noodles, but sometimes I don’t feel like eating breakfast. After breakfast, I do some homework. When I finish my homework, then it is time to have lunch. Sometimes, I take a break at noon.

In the afternoon, I go to the garden to do some exercise, such as running, swimming, or playing basketball. I think doing some exercises is good for our health, so I exercise almost every day.

In the evening after dinner, I do some leisure activities. I always watch TV with my parents, but sometimes I watch videos on my computer and my phone.

Finally, I go to bed. So that is my daily life.

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